originally written in 2013 but didn't post. a good reflection of my process into a dialogue shot at the very early stage:
ws5 journal assign 02
01/11/13 10:24
spent yesterday going through audio clips and landed on what i think is going to be the choice.
i feel like i need to be more specific about the scenario and the character. was thinking along the lines of Jerry Lundergard from fargo for character: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E5gwc4UizUc
and a scenario like this monty python skit: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9igQ18GIqvc
did some sketching and did the who what where when. got to remember to follow ed hooks' action objective obstacle, really helps distill what you are trying to say.
i went a bit away from the salesman idea and started sketching a scientist with a james bond type character inspecting his new issue car. what struck me was how adding the 2nd character as slightly menacing helped with the dynamic of the scene and to connect with the genuine interactions of these characters.
also note the clear difference in body language and how that instantly sets up the characters and context.
so i went back to the car yard with this new idea of introducing character number 2. the main issue i was having was giving car salesman stakes. why was he so nervous? what worked about prev sketch was the nature of the pose of jb character in contrast to scientist. he is leaning casually on the car but his body is thrusting towards the scientist giving a sense of veiled threat- which is in keeping with a jb type character. it is in this pose alone that introduces the stakes, the audience already sees the threat all we need to do is reinforce it.
at this stage i am bringing in a character that is either a safety inspector or an overly shrewd customer.
the comedy in this i feel is the fact that the threatening character in question is much shorter than salesman.
when going into further development remember to keep the following clear:
head, shoulders, arms, fingers of salesmen in clear silo
head and neck of customer/ safety officer in silo
hood ornament in silo
ws5 journal assign 02
01/11/13 10:24
spent yesterday going through audio clips and landed on what i think is going to be the choice.
the general idea is a car salesman trying to make a hard sell on a lemon. i realise you can take out the opening audio and he doesn't need to be talking about a car. a thought i have is he could nervously touch the car and something falls off it causing him to quickly put it back checking to see if the customer saw.
i feel like i need to be more specific about the scenario and the character. was thinking along the lines of Jerry Lundergard from fargo for character: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E5gwc4UizUc
and a scenario like this monty python skit: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9igQ18GIqvc
did some sketching and did the who what where when. got to remember to follow ed hooks' action objective obstacle, really helps distill what you are trying to say.
i went a bit away from the salesman idea and started sketching a scientist with a james bond type character inspecting his new issue car. what struck me was how adding the 2nd character as slightly menacing helped with the dynamic of the scene and to connect with the genuine interactions of these characters.
also note the clear difference in body language and how that instantly sets up the characters and context.
so i went back to the car yard with this new idea of introducing character number 2. the main issue i was having was giving car salesman stakes. why was he so nervous? what worked about prev sketch was the nature of the pose of jb character in contrast to scientist. he is leaning casually on the car but his body is thrusting towards the scientist giving a sense of veiled threat- which is in keeping with a jb type character. it is in this pose alone that introduces the stakes, the audience already sees the threat all we need to do is reinforce it.
at this stage i am bringing in a character that is either a safety inspector or an overly shrewd customer.
the comedy in this i feel is the fact that the threatening character in question is much shorter than salesman.
when going into further development remember to keep the following clear:
head, shoulders, arms, fingers of salesmen in clear silo
head and neck of customer/ safety officer in silo
hood ornament in silo
